radio advertisement draft and feedback

Using the script, I decided to create a draft of a radio advert to ask for feedback from my target audience to see whether they identified with this.

Here is a link to my radio advert draft: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=c__aJwBwnuE

Below here are quotes showing what my audience thought about the radio advert draft:

Taking into consideration the feedback that I have received, I will improve certain parts of my radio advert in order for it to attract my target audience more in terms of taste.